martes, 25 de octubre de 2016

La Serena.

The best holidays in the last years was in "La Serena", 3 years ago.
I still remember this travel was really important for me, because, I could shared with my mom, discovered that want studied and knew one of my favorite city,
I took some tours for the city and near village. I knew the Elqui Valley and Coquimbo, in the valley visited "Los Nichos"a place where is produced "pisco"a liquor Chilean traditional, then I went to Vicuña, Montegrande, Diaguita (town where is fabricated the handmade beer "Guayacan", is very good by if you want taste). In Coquimbo, I knew the city, I ate seafood and ride by the English nightlife.
This travel was really important. Helped me to know that want studied in a couple the years more, in this place I decided study geography. After that I had a way more clear that follow.
But mostly shared with my mom this travel was very important for me. Always being difficult shared together, the work and study, don't let see much time, then this moments were very appreciated for me. Ate much, slaughtered much, this vacation were ours.
This vacations was very messy, I believe than can speaking more it, but this is the more important and relevant, was the reading in this post.

Regards

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3 comentarios:

  1. Hi!
    your vacations sounds really fun!!
    I had one suggestion for you, I think there is an error with the verb "can", because this is a present verb and you are speaking in past, so it should be the verb "could" in this part: " I can shared with my mom". Cheers

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  2. The best holidays in the last years was in "La Serena", 3 years ago. (TS)
    I still remember this (travel) TRIP THAT was really important for me, because, I could share[d] with my mom, discovered [that want studied] and knew one of my favorite city, (SS1)
    I took some tours for the city and near villageS. I knew the Elqui Valley and Coquimbo, (EXAMPLE)
    in the valley (I) visited "Los Nichos"a place where 4)is produced 1)"pisco"a 3)liquor 2)Chilean 1)traditional, (EXAMPLE)
    then I went to Vicuña, Montegrande, Diaguita (town where (is fabricated) the handmade beer "Guayacan", IS MADE; IT is very good (by) if you want TO taste IT). In Coquimbo, I knew the city, I (ate) ATE seafood (and ride by the English nightlife???). EXAMPLE-EXPLANATION
    This (travel) TRIP was really important. I(SS2)
    T Helped me to know [t]What I wantED TO study[ied] in a couple the years more, in (this) THAT place I decided TO study geography. After that[,] I had a CLEARER PATH TO (way more clear that) follow. (EXPLANATION)
    But mostly [I] shared with my mom (this travel was very important for me).(SS3)
    IT IS ALWAYS DIFFICULT FOR US TO SHARE TIME, HER WORK AND MY STUDIES DON’T LEAVE MUCH FREE TIME FOR US. (Always being difficult shared together, the work and study, don't let see much time,) (EXPLANATION??)
    then [this=SINGULAR] [moments PLURAL] were very appreciated for me. (EXPLANATION)
    WE? Ate much, (slaughtered much: YOU DIDN’T MEAN THIS, FOR SURE)
    ,[ this vacation=SINGULAR] [were=PLURAL] ours.
    [This=SIINGULAR] [vacations=PLURAL] [was=SINGULAR] very messy, I believe than [can speaking more it] (UNCLEAR), but this is the more important and relevant, was the reading in this post.(UNCLEAR)
    Natalia,
    You need a much better job when editing your text. You have so many mistakes, that it is hard to follow. You should know: the difference between singular and plural words, that adjectives are written BEFORE nouns in English, that the word order should be Subject+verb+Object, etc etc. Please, pay attention to your text and make sure that the structure you are using is absolutely clear.

    Cheers,

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